My birthday
Last Tuesday, I was happy because it was my birthday. In the
morning, I went to the temple. I made merit at the Buddha. After that I went to
Kanjanaburi with my family by van. It looks about three hours. And then I went
to Huai Mae Kamin Waterfall. I did some sightseeing and took a lot of photos.
Next I went to visit my grandmother. After that I went home. While I had a
dinner with family,
my friends surprise me. I was
shocked and excited. I didn’t think my friends can remember my birthday. I was
impressed with my friends. It was special day for me and I had a lot of fun.
I think that's a very interesting thing to read but I like this place too and exciting.
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Your story is not bad. But there are a little of the wrong point such as from your sentence "I was happiness",it is not correct. "I was happy" from this sentence is correct. I think that you should to learn about vocaburary and tenses more. So I give you 7.3/10.
ตอบลบYour story is very interesting, but you have a little mistake and you should add more information. I give you 7.5/10.
ตอบลบYour story is very interesting and It’s a about your birthday. You choose the topic is very interesting, easy to understand, and good grammar. If you have more information it will make your work is good job so I will give you 8/10
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