My favorite place.
This is a
picture of Huai Mae Kha Min Waterfall. It’s
located in Sisawat District, Kanchanaburi. Huai Mae Kha Min
Waterfall was very interesting place for me. I
will go to Huai Mae Kha Min Waterfall on holiday with my family. There
was near with the Khueansrinagarindra National Park. There
was surrounded by the animals and plants. I touched the
natural fresh air in the morning. I saw the birds flying to
the coconut trees for far away. When I looked at the tree,
I saw a cheetah on a branch and a cheetah on a rock. And
then, I heard the sound of the Waterfall was flowing down. I
smelled the steam that floats from the Waterfall. When
I sat on the rock, the dolphin was jumping up from the water and the rabbits
were playing around me. Both the flowers were located
amid beautiful butterfly.
This is
information about my favorite place is Huai Mae Kha Min Waterfall.
Why I like there because I like natural it makes me
feel refreshed and comfortable whenever I go there.
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ตอบลบYou have a great imagination. Your paragraph is well-organized. But you have some mistakes. I like your story I give you 8.5 / 10
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